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Lamias are genuinely one of my favorite monsters and I adore this story! I cannot wait for more!

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This is really good so far! I enjoy it! Cute but tough Lamia is the best! 😈

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Agreed, I do love the cute & tough trope!! Add smol to that and it's basically my perfect trifecta.

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Yes my Lamia is also smol! Smol but long! 

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are you considering having an option of being male on earth and becoming a female when isekaied? I'm a fan of that trope so I was curious if that would be considered an option. Great story so far and I am enjoying it

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Nope, no plans for that. Last thing Ariel needs is Tanya in lamia form :D

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well I am excited for more of this story, I hope you have fun making it too ^w^

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I love your story, it has been something I have been talking about for ages. A game where I can play as a "monster" not only that but I get to play as one of my favorite ones.  I can't wait to see where this goes. Also not to mention the writing is so good, especially given that you are writing from a perspective of something that is humaniodish but not human. I know some writers in my personal life who struggle with writing form the same perspective that you just handled perfectly. The details of having a nest instead of a bed and finding chairs uncomfortable and don't even get me started on that fight scene. 

the only weird thing was that my height was only 5"2, but it kept talking about me as if I was a towering creature tall enough  to look over most creatures. I just attributed it to the character standing more on their snake half when standing still and talking but for things like the scene when the party was walking through town it read, to me, like I could see over characters like Daniel

finally I should leave my lamias description that i made for your story. idk why I just want to. I picked unarmed and stealth as my two first skills, then for my characters appearance I chose hip length light red hair, I imagined that to be a kind of coppery ginger hair. With gray eyes, and sapphire scales, I felt it contrasted the light red hair and it would look great. then for the clothes I chose the goth/punk choice.     

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It's not that the MC towers over everyone, unless you make them tall, but even a "short" lamia is rather bulky compared to standard humanoid races, which in turn leads to some difficulty maneuvering on occasion. A good example is when the MC is in the wagon on the way to Reabelle and tries to turn around, she is so long it makes doing so difficult.

That said if you can point out where it read like that so I can adjust it I would appreciate it. Smol snakes shouldn't be seeing things from to high.

Your MC sounds adorable!

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I'm really enjoying this so far, and I really hope to see it continue

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About a quarter of the way through chapter three, so it shouldn't be long.

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Out of curiosity, are there plans to update your other games as well? I never played Symbiosis, but I really liked The Final Girl and In My Skin, so I'd love to see those continued at some point too.

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Final Girl is unfortunately in a state of limbo, I ran into a bit of a block and have been having trouble finding my way out. In My Skin and Symbiosis are still being worked on though.